Do you like my poem, garden salad?

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Dependable fascism

Responsible corporatism

Soaking up ether and jism



Scholar up on a ladder

Replacing bulbs

With fermented oranges



Finds gold in a moist cave

Leaves it behind

It'll slow the search of his sisters



Geraniums pinned to his ears

A bible on his head

A dictionary in his pants



Just a pawn in a game

Of gestapo networks

And snickering widowers



His blue fingertips

Left prints behind

A frazzled, passionless crime



His lips are locking

To tongues of the dead

So experienced



Facelessly he hunts me

Examining my future

Reminding me of my past



Picking fights in the night

Shipping useless cargo

To forgotten and decimated lands



He looks on his page

Sees my sentiments

Severs his hand



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Do you like my poem, garden salad?
Well you have left this would like, to be ,poet feeling very inadequate, have you been reading, Martina Cole?

or are you the real deal?
Reply:bit too "arty" for my liking!
Reply:WTF is that? u need help!
Reply:"Scholar up a ladder replacing lightbulbs with fermented oranges." I like it.
Reply:The symbolism is just "ok", passable but a little bit of an acid-like trip with its questionable imagery. Why does he have geraniums pinned to his ears is my question? And spoiled oranges for bulbs? Which page is he looking at and why is his severing his hand on account of your poem? A little bit arrogant and presumptuous, don't you think? Other than that, it has a sense of rhyme and flow, ends ok maybe a bit stained to end.
Reply:damn that wus touching.

r u a professional poem writer

it sounds like theres a story behind it

if there is message me about it i would like to know
Reply:Oh, thats just great! Did you make that or did you find it? If you did make it great job!!! If you didn't, you got great taste.

Oh yah, I got to answer your question. Yes, I do like you'r poem - Garden Salad. Keep up the great work!



Cheers!
Reply:I think its pretty intresting.... get it published

Its pretty cool if you ask me makes you think
Reply:Damn good...
Reply:It's aweesome!!
Reply:Sorry ,I don't get it. The imigery is disturbing. I give it an E for effort. What does it have to do with salad?
Reply:I dont properly understand what this poem means. But im sure you do dont you?

Well, i think its an excellent poem and very well written and even if people say its rubbish because they dont know what it means, dont listen to them.



Keep writing ;)
Reply:i dont get it
Reply:its too long...
Reply:I'm not sure what it means. A poem means more to the writer because they're the only one who can TRULY understand it. However, I think it is very well written.
Reply:uh... I think its ok, but its a little too vague, and your trying to hit a sertain topic, but I think your should express your theme more clearly, 'cause as a poet, I try and build up a scenery, your just explaining a life or personality, all in all i'ld give it a 7 out of 10 (for its deepness) although its always good to keep a poem vague, so the reader can think what it means for a long time, but definitley be more clear. As Edger Allen Poe wrote in his "How To Write a Black Letter Article", " If you want to say Bread and butter, use other words, never say exactly what you want to say, use hints."